A brand new festive short love story for the holiday season.Jilted Emily bravely decides to go on her honeymoon to Costa Rica alone. When she finally reaches her hotel, her misfortunes increase when she discovers her room, the last available, has been double booked. And to make matters worse - the other occupant is an old high-school boyfriend of hers. Can she make this ChA brand new festive short love story for the holiday season.Jilted Emily bravely decides to go on her honeymoon to Costa Rica alone. When she finally reaches her hotel, her misfortunes increase when she discovers her room, the last available, has been double booked. And to make matters worse - the other occupant is an old high-school boyfriend of hers. Can she make this Christmas nightmare into a Christmas dream?A Sample Story from The Little Romance Book of Christmas Love Stories : A Collection of Festive Short Romantic Stories for The Holiday Season (Little Romance Books)...
|Title||:||a second chance with emily|
|Format Type||:||Kindle Edition|
|Number of Pages||:||23 Pages|
|Status||:||Available For Download|
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a second chance with emily Reviews
29/9 - A few (way too many for a 23 page 'book') editing mistakes/plot holes.Chapter 2, location 106'Sylvester ? Was that his name?'The question mark is separated from the end of the sentence by an unnecessary space.Chapter 2, location 123"Tell you what," he said sighing with a strange, deep down frustration'He's slightly sexually frustrated and being kicked out of his hotel room by the object of his desire. Why is his frustration in any way strange? It makes perfect sense to me that he would be frustrated in this situation.Chapter 3, location 142"The idea came to me when I discovered that both you and Emily had booked his resort for Christmas."That his should be a this.Chapter 4, location 181'He would always kissed her cheek...'That should either be He always kissed her cheek or He would always kiss her cheek. Otherwise the tenses clash horribly.Chapter 4, location 186"I guess I can't come to Costa Rica and not walk on the beach." This is the reason Emily gives for agreeing to join Adam for a walk on the beach. Except she's already walked on the beach, well at least she told us that's what she was going to do first thing that morning.Chapter 4, location 192'She could see the sunset reflected into his warm brown eyes...'That should be 'reflected in', otherwise it sounds like the light from the sunset is hitting some mysterious mirror hanging in space and that is reflecting the sunset into his eyes.Chapter 5, location 256'...awaking her body...'Awaking' just doesn't sound right, 'awakening' would be a much less awkward choice here.Once you've put the mistakes to the side the story is okay (hence the 'it was okay' two star rating). It was a little tired and cliché, but if Lindsey expanded on the characters over an extra hundred pages or so and did some editing, I think it could be a solid three starrer.
Sex A Little Rushed?The love making was so rushed that by the time they actually were making love I didn't know it. Maybe the scene was edited for page length. This book would've been a great longer length story. The characters were one dimensional. I think the author couldn't develop them because of length. It would've been great to read more full bodied characters in a longer story.